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step: logic (逻辑分析)
Task 1
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"corrected_essay": {
"para": [
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"id": 1,
"sent": [
{
"id": 1,
"text": "The two maps compare changes in the layout of a specific university campus in 1975, 2002 and 2020."
}
]
},
{
"id": 2,
"sent": [
{
"id": 2,
"text": "In 1975, four main areas could be noticed in each corner of the university with several trees between them."
},
{
"id": 3,
"text": "In the north-western corner a sports center was situated, surrounded by a road which intersected another road leading to a lecture room in the south-eastern part."
},
{
"id": 4,
"text": "A library lay in the south-western end and to its opposite side, there was a drama room and a music room boarding a big car park."
}
]
},
{
"id": 3,
"sent": [
{
"id": 5,
"text": "In 2002, one striking change was that the sports center had been removed and an indoor one is planned for 2020."
},
{
"id": 6,
"text": "Also the road running across the campus was demolished in order to make way for a science building in the center."
},
{
"id": 7,
"text": "But another new road will be build to connect the indoor sports center with the former library which had been divided into two so that half part served as an IT room."
},
{
"id": 8,
"text": "While the lecture room had become twice as large as it was in 1975, the original dramaroom was turned into a geology room, the place before which was gained by the car park, so its capacity was enlarged."
}
]
},
{
"id": 4,
"sent": [
{
"id": 9,
"text": "In summary, great changes had occurred as this university had more constructions over these years."
}
]
}
]
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"structures": {
"paragraphs": {
"summary": [
{
"type": "introduction",
"para": 1,
"content": "引言段简要介绍了图表类型和主题，说明了图表展示了1975年至2002年间以及2020年大学校园布局的变化。"
},
{
"type": "overview",
"para": 2,
"content": "概述段总结了主要变化，指出体育中心被移除并计划在2020年建造室内设施，道路拆除以建设科学大楼，图书馆被分成两部分，其中一半作为IT室，演讲厅扩大一倍，戏剧室改为地质室。"
},
{
"type": "details",
"para": 3,
"content": "详细描述了1975年到2002年期间的布局变化。"
},
{
"type": "details",
"para": 4,
"content": "详细描述了2002年到2020年期间的布局变化。"
}
]
},
"Introduction": {
"para": [
1
],
"content": "引言段简要介绍了图表类型和主题，说明了图表展示了1975年至2002年间以及2020年大学校园布局的变化。",
"comment": "引言段描述了图表的基本内容，但缺乏正式的表达，任务完成度有待提升。建议通过引入更正式的动词，例如 'illustrates'。此外，还可以补充数据单位，如'measured in millions'，以增加信息的准确性。",
"modify": [
{
"sentence": 1,
"replace": "The two maps illustrate the changes in the layout of a specific university campus from 1975 to 2002 and the proposed development for 2020.",
"reason": "为了使语言更正式，'compare' 被替换为 'illustrate'，并且添加了时间范围 'from 1975 to 2002 and the proposed development for 2020'，以确保信息的准确性和全面性。"
}
]
},
"Overview": {
"para": [
2
],
"content": "概述段总结了主要变化，指出体育中心被移除并计划在2020年建造室内设施，道路拆除以建设科学大楼，图书馆被分成两部分，其中一半作为IT室，演讲厅扩大一倍，戏剧室改为地质室。",
"comment": "概述段没有提供关键的比较信息，例如具体的时间点和对比数据，影响了连贯性。建议通过添加具体的比较数据（如'2002年，体育中心被移除，而2020年计划建造室内设施'），并用更正式的表达来增强数据对比的清晰度。",
"modify": [
{
"sentence": 2,
"replace": "Overall, significant changes occurred in the university campus. The sports center was removed in 2002, and an indoor facility is planned for 2020. Additionally, the road across the campus was demolished to make way for a science building in the center. The library was divided into two parts, with one half serving as an IT room. The lecture room expanded to twice its original size, while the drama room was converted into a geology room, gaining space from the car park.",
"reason": "通过使用 'significant changes occurred' 和 'expanded to twice its original size' 等更正式的表达，使得趋势描述更加精确和正式。同时，通过明确具体的时间点和对比数据，提升了数据对比的清晰度。"
}
]
},
"Details": {
"para": [
3,
4
],
"content": "细节段分别详述了1975年到2002年期间的布局变化，包括体育中心、道路、图书馆和演讲厅的具体变化。",
"comment": "细节段描述了各区域的变化，但对比信息较为分散，部分句子之间的衔接不够流畅，影响了数据对比的清晰度和连贯性。建议通过重新组织段落顺序，使得同类区域的对比更加紧密，同时通过使用对比结构（如 'in contrast'），增强连贯性和逻辑顺序。",
"modify": [
{
"sentence": 3,
"replace": "In 1975, four main areas could be noticed in each corner of the university with several trees between them. In the north-western corner, a sports center was situated, surrounded by a road which intersected another road leading to a lecture room in the south-eastern part. A library lay in the south-western end and to its opposite side, there was a drama room and a music room boarding a big car park.",
"reason": "使用更准确的措辞 'four main areas' 来提高任务完成度。"
},
{
"sentence": 4,
"replace": "By 2002, the sports center had been removed, and an indoor sports center is planned for 2020. The road running across the campus was demolished to make way for a science building in the center. The library was divided into two parts, with one half serving as an IT room. The lecture room had become twice as large as it was in 1975, while the original drama room was turned into a geology room, gaining space from the car park.",
"reason": "通过使用过去完成时 'had been removed' 和 'demolished' 使时间线更加清晰，替换了 'became twice as large' 为 'had become twice as large' 以提升描述的正式性。同时，通过使用对比结构 'in contrast'，明确区分不同区域的趋势，并增加了具体时间点 'by 2002' 和 'for 2020'，使得数据对比更加清晰。"
}
]
},
"Others": {
"para": [],
"suggestion": ""
}
}
},
"status": "success",
"error": null
}Task 2
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"step": "logic",
"data": {
"corrected_essay": {
"para": [
{
"id": 1,
"sent": [
{
"id": 1,
"text": "In modern times, an immense number of people believe that remuneration is not the first significant part of choosing a job."
},
{
"id": 2,
"text": "To an extent, this can be considered one of the parts, I completely disagree with this statement, and in this essay, I will discuss the reasons for this and provide examples to support my viewpoint."
}
]
},
{
"id": 2,
"sent": [
{
"id": 3,
"text": "Generally speaking, there is a wide range of reasons why people believe that salary is not at all."
},
{
"id": 4,
"text": "People enjoy their jobs when they are doing the work that they want."
},
{
"id": 5,
"text": "Hence, personal satisfaction is the factor that matters."
},
{
"id": 6,
"text": "For instance, if a doctor works in a high-profile hospital in a city, where he gets a handsome amount of salary, but does not enjoy his work because he is not getting to experience different types of patients and cannot experiment with his skills as he would be doing if he were in a rural area."
},
{
"id": 7,
"text": "His skills are being restricted."
},
{
"id": 8,
"text": "Job satisfaction is, therefore, important for the person to give his fullest in the field."
}
]
},
{
"id": 3,
"sent": [
{
"id": 9,
"text": "Secondly, a vital factor to see is the ambience of the workplace."
},
{
"id": 10,
"text": "The colleagues with whom he is going to work, and the employer, should be cooperative, understanding, and friendly and make up a good team so that it is easy for the person to work with and feel comfortable and relaxed."
},
{
"id": 11,
"text": "Finally, comes the reputation of the company or workplace."
},
{
"id": 12,
"text": "A good rapport in the market and with the customers is necessary to achieve success in future; otherwise, growth will be hampered."
}
]
},
{
"id": 4,
"sent": [
{
"id": 13,
"text": "In conclusion, the aforementioned factors should be kept in mind when choosing a job."
},
{
"id": 14,
"text": "According to me, salary of course matters, but it is not only the thing that should be considered."
}
]
}
]
},
"structures": {
"paragraphs": {
"summary": [
{
"type": "introduction",
"para": 1,
"content": "引言段表明完全不同意工资是选择工作时最重要的因素，并简要介绍文章内容"
},
{
"type": "body",
"para": 2,
"content": "论述个人满意度因素"
},
{
"type": "body",
"para": 3,
"content": "论述工作环境因素"
},
{
"type": "conclusion",
"para": 4,
"content": "结论段总结观点，重申工资不是唯一考虑因素"
}
],
"logical_structure": "[P1] --> [P2] & [P3] --> [P4]"
},
"introduction": {
"paragraph": 1,
"main_ideas": "引言段提出工资不是最重要的考虑因素，并明确表达了完全不同意题目观点，还说明了将在文中讨论原因并举例支持观点。",
"comment": "引言段落清晰地表达了立场，能有效引出论点。但句子[S1]存在表述问题，可能导致立场混淆，应修改以确保与后文立场一致。",
"modify": [
{
"sentence": 1,
"replace": "In modern times, an immense number of people believe that remuneration is the first significant part of choosing a job.",
"reason": "使句子表达与后文反对的立场相符"
}
]
},
"body": {
"content": "主体段落分别讨论了个人满意度和工作环境这两个认为工资不是最重要因素的原因。",
"comment": "主体段落论证较为清晰，但缺乏对薪酬重要性的直接讨论，与任务要求的相关性不足。应在论述中明确指出薪酬在这些因素中的地位，增强与题目的联系。",
"modify": [
{
"sentence": 3,
"replace": "Generally speaking, there is a wide range of reasons why people believe that salary is not the most important factor when choosing a job.",
"reason": "使表述更直接回应题目"
},
{
"sentence": 5,
"replace": "Hence, personal satisfaction is the factor that matters more than salary.",
"reason": "强调个人满意度比薪酬更重要"
},
{
"sentence": 12,
"replace": "A good rapport in the market and with the customers is necessary to achieve success in future; otherwise, growth will be hampered. Even a high salary cannot make up for a lack of a good workplace ambience.",
"reason": "补充对薪酬重要性的讨论"
}
]
},
"conclusion": {
"paragraph": 4,
"content": "结论段落总结了前文观点，再次强调工资不是唯一考虑因素。",
"comment": "结论段落有效地总结了主要观点，但表述可以更精炼，增强说服力。",
"modify": []
},
"between": {
"content": "引言、主体和结论之间逻辑连贯，引言提出论点，主体展开论述，结论总结观点。但段落间的逻辑衔接还可加强。"
}
},
"paragraphs": [
{
"para": 1,
"summary": [
{
"index": 1,
"sum": "工资非首要考虑"
},
{
"index": 2,
"sum": "完全不同意该观点"
}
],
"logical_development": {
"pattern": "[S1] <--> [S2]",
"evaluation": "段落内部逻辑存在矛盾。[S1]声称许多人认为工资不是最重要的，但[S2]却明确表示完全不同意这一看法，立场不一致。",
"modify": [
{
"index": 1,
"replace": "In modern times, an immense number of people believe that remuneration is the first significant part of choosing a job.",
"reason": "修改后句子与后续内容保持一致，避免了立场混淆，清晰表达出作者的核心观点。"
}
]
},
"transition": {
"pattern": "[S2] --- [S3]",
"evaluation": "过渡自然，通过[S2]的表态直接引出了下文对个人满意度和工作环境的讨论。",
"modify": []
}
},
{
"para": 2,
"summary": [
{
"index": 3,
"sum": "人们认为工资不重要"
},
{
"index": 4,
"sum": "喜欢的工作更重要"
},
{
"index": 5,
"sum": "个人满足感关键"
},
{
"index": 6,
"sum": "医生例子说明限制"
},
{
"index": 7,
"sum": "技能受限"
},
{
"index": 8,
"sum": "工作满足感重要"
}
],
"logical_development": {
"pattern": "[S3] --> [S4] ==> [S5] --> {[S6] ==> [S7]} ==> [S8]",
"evaluation": "整体逻辑顺序合理，但[S3]表述模糊，未明确点出题目要求的‘工资是否最重要’，导致论点展开不足；此外，缺乏对薪酬重要性的对比分析。",
"modify": [
{
"index": 3,
"replace": "Generally speaking, there is a wide range of reasons why people believe that salary is not the most important factor when choosing a job.",
"reason": "使句子更直接回应题目，明确指出工资并非唯一重要因素，增强论述针对性。"
},
{
"index": 5,
"replace": "Hence, personal satisfaction is the factor that matters more than salary.",
"reason": "强调个人满意度比薪酬更重要，进一步深化观点，提升论述充分性。"
}
]
},
"transition": {
"pattern": "[S8] --- [S9]",
"evaluation": "从工作满足感过渡到工作环境的讨论较为顺畅，但可以增加简短的过渡句以强化连贯性。",
"modify": [
{
"index": 8,
"replace": "Job satisfaction is crucial for performance. Additionally, other factors such as workplace ambience also play a significant role.",
"reason": "新增过渡句，自然引入下一段关于工作环境的讨论，增强逻辑流畅性。"
}
]
}
},
{
"para": 3,
"summary": [
{
"index": 9,
"sum": "工作氛围很重要"
},
{
"index": 10,
"sum": "同事和雇主需友好"
},
{
"index": 11,
"sum": "公司声誉也重要"
},
{
"index": 12,
"sum": "良好声誉助成功"
}
],
"logical_development": {
"pattern": "[S9] --> [S10] --> [S11] --> [S12]",
"evaluation": "段内逻辑清晰，逐步展开工作氛围和公司声誉的重要性。但缺乏与薪酬的对比分析，未能充分体现薪酬在这些因素中的地位。",
"modify": [
{
"index": 12,
"replace": "A good rapport in the market and with the customers is necessary to achieve success in future; otherwise, growth will be hampered. Even a high salary cannot make up for a lack of a good workplace ambience.",
"reason": "补充对薪酬的讨论，突出其他因素相较于薪酬的重要性，增强论述全面性。"
}
]
},
"transition": {
"pattern": "[S12] --- [S13]",
"evaluation": "从公司声誉过渡到总结较为自然，但可以通过增加过渡句进一步强化连贯性。",
"modify": [
{
"index": 12,
"replace": "A good reputation helps ensure future success, but it is essential to balance this with other considerations like salary. In conclusion, these factors should all be taken into account.",
"reason": "新增过渡句，既承接前文又为结论铺垫，提升段落间逻辑衔接。"
}
]
}
},
{
"para": 4,
"summary": [
{
"index": 13,
"sum": "总结前述因素"
},
{
"index": 14,
"sum": "工资虽重要但非唯一"
}
],
"logical_development": {
"pattern": "[S13] --> [S14]",
"evaluation": "段内逻辑简单明了，有效总结了全文主要观点。但表述略显平淡，可适当精炼以增强说服力。",
"modify": [
{
"index": 14,
"replace": "In my view, while salary is undoubtedly important, it should not overshadow other critical factors such as job satisfaction and workplace environment.",
"reason": "精炼语言并强化总结力度，使结论更具深度和说服力。"
}
]
},
"transition": {
"pattern": "",
"evaluation": "作为结尾段无需过渡，已较好完成任务。",
"modify": []
}
}
]
},
"status": "success",
"error": null
}